A Lover's Sun

[adalger]

Place your arms around me, so:
A shield against the crying cold --
I feel it wait there; I must go

Deep into the piling snow
That covers that once-verdant fold.
Place your arms around me, so

They shelter from the bitter blow
My heart that shivers, shriveled, old,
I feel it. Wait there. I must go

A step alone, for none may know
These secrets listened to and told.
Place your arms around me. So

Defenseless, I must face the foe,
The fear, the frozen faceless -- BOLD
I feel it wait! THERE I must go

NOW and can you help me? NO!
But ... yes, oh Sunlight, warm and gold!
Place your arms around me, so
I FEEL it. Wait. There I must ... go.

Comments

[cyberjunkie]

i really like the way you changed the emphasis and reading with punctuation on your final lines on this one.

[adalger]

This is, largely, the beauty of the forms like villanelle, terzanelle, and pantoum. (Besides, I was aiming for a high P value on the J Evans Pritchard scale. :P )